How the Poem comes

 

Here is Canon’s challenge over at the dverse poets….I love minimalist verse….

Not worrying about the written form too much, try to write a poem using mainly tangible images to convey your thoughts, using as little abstract vocabulary as possible. If you find it difficult, focus on a single image and try to convey a lot of meaning in as small a space as you can.

Eric

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Blue skies for some,

For others, cumulus assemble

(Drought begins before we know.)

Cast shadows,

Forward march,

Bring rain

Fall.

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© neelthemuse, 2012

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  1. Effective use of many elements making up with little to say much. The shape or concrete does the outline work while each color, each noun brings up the vast array of associations, and especially Forward March conjuring up grade school, March winds & April showers, and the idea of drought on the horizon is certainly familiar here in Texas where we are finally getting a break in ours! Exceptional!

  2. Thank you Marie for your view and interesting question. The process is very important…it makes the product possible. When the poem comes, there is this cloud-arriving feeling and then there is clarity. That’s what I tried to express. The product means more to the people who read it, but the process makes the poet feel grateful. Hope that is answer enough.

  3. Bring rain – fall

    I love the blending of those lines. Your verse is rich with imagery presenting different viewpoints, a joy, a blessing, a nuisance and a need, all packed into a minimalist piece. The depth is palpable. Wonderful work.

  4. drought itself brings much to mind for me…and the need for rain as i have lived that….you have screwed this one down pretty tight yet you still say much…

  5. A great post about using fewer words. Some of my favorite poems are minimal – I tend to get distracted by poems that are too wordy. I think that’s why haiku is such a timeless format for writing poetry.

  6. Very successful minimalist verse, Neel! I can never grow anything but happier to read more and more poems about rains following droughts!

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